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words tossed gently
on a spinning river top
sink as stones to rise again
and kiss the break of day.

resurface, ripple, and repeat.
not you again.
next poem I upload will by fixed forms. promise. ^^;






Other poetry by me you may enjoy:
Pianist: [link]
In The Garden: [link]
Yellow Spring: [link]
Beneath The Black Willows: [link]
We Dreamed Of Silver Sails: [link]


Please leave a comment on your way out? :thanks:

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Poem © Sadee Esquivel
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:iconadagiobunny:
Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Student Writer
so many circles & cycles - pebbles in clear pools, thoughts rippling outward...
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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coveredwithgrass Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
a really beautiful piece.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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coveredwithgrass Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
not at all. 'tis my pleasure.
also i have added you to my watch. i really like your work :)
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you very much!! :squee:
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coveredwithgrass Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
you're very welcome! :)
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KJ-Illustration Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Your wonderful work has been featured here: [link] :heart:
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thank you so much~!! It's an honor and I highly appreciate it~! :happybounce:
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CyborgDeamonEaterG Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Student General Artist
pretty, its feels like it has a secret meaning well more than one that is

I must read deeper into this mystery

its very pretty though, even though it dosnt all rhyme it dose sound smooth, lovely
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reading and sharing your observations~!! :love: C:
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CyborgDeamonEaterG Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Student General Artist
no problem c;
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Zaphod-Beeblebrox58 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
I like this a lot...except for "river top"...would it sound better if you dropped "top"?
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm, I guess it would help the flow, but I like the way it is now ^^; thank you for reading though!!
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Zaphod-Beeblebrox58 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
You're the writer ;) I was just thinking about the rhythm
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: <33
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scaryllamastare Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
Lovely! :heart: (:
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :bow:
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victoroquendo Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
wow
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
.....good wow or bad wow? :?
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victoroquendo Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
Amazing.
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :iconcutenessoverloadplz:
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theresahelmer Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Professional Photographer
Great job
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~!! :blowkiss:
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EverlastingSong Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Student General Artist
This is really amazing.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! I'm glad you think so! :hug:
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maybe-paper-hearts Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Student Photographer
so beautiful
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyouthankyou~! :heart:
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VhillsVegas Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Professional Interface Designer
it's fresh and serene, and it leaves me calm. loving it~. :heart:
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~!! I love to see when poetry has that effect on people! :aww:
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AuroraStudio Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Professional Writer
Very nice! and why the stress to stick to fixed forms?? Nothing wrong with free style (though I do notice a startling amount of draw to it here on DA...not so much in the classrooms)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's true :c Maybe I feel like I'm cheating when it comes to free verse because it's so much easier than fixed forms XD I don't know, sometimes I feel that the more time I put into a poem, the more meaningful it is to myself. That, and the fact I have a ton of fixed form poem sitting around that I need to finish x) :lmao:
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AuroraStudio Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Professional Writer
lol I always find that free form tends to be more genuine and meaningful BECAUSE they're not trying to fit their thoughts into a constricting form. But I know that it certainly is harder to write in fixed forms...
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's very true (: Thank you for your thoughts!! :aww:
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AuroraStudio Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Professional Writer
I mean people being drawn to fixed forms, not free style, which is really a shame (and a lot of fixed forms are discouraged in university).
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RavenGemma Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
This is amazing, so breathtaking! I absolutely -love- how the water's ripples are hazy, until meeting her feet. Thank you for sharing! :D
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I didn't take the photo, but thank you anyways I suppose ^^;
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AngieAvadaKedavra Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student Photographer
I dont know why! but I LIKE IT! :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, well thanks for reading~!! :lmao:
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jasi-jan Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012
I love this!
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well I'm very glad!! Thank you!! :heart:
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ChocolateBarrelRacer Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like! :D :heart:
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks~!! :highfive:
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MagicWaves139 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
The poem is lovely ^^

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May I use the picture? :)
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! I'm glad you think so (: :blowkiss:
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MagicWaves139 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
May I use it? I'll be sure to credit you ^^
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:iconholdthenoise:
HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Um, sure! :aww: Use it how, may I ask?
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MagicWaves139 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Oh I'll use as a manipulation photo for a PSD I'm planning to make :>
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