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    It came in tasteful gestures on a shouldered backward breeze. Ghosts of smiling children rocked the rusting set of swings. Plucking yellow daisy tops, in streams the stones did sink. While birds of cream and navy rode above a gust of pink. The sun rays pressed their fingers through the isle of cobwebbed clouds. Spitting shafts of sunlight lift the humming branches' sound. The sipping of the soil weaned as dewdrops fell in threes. In this brutte of cradled roots I lay beneath the trees.
I know nature is a subject poets have literally beat - to - death,
but when I woke up this morning and looked out my window, I couldn't help but scribble down a few observations... C:


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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you so much for writing a decent poem that isn't free verse. I'm not extremely knowledgeable about poetry but it seems like free verse stuff gets all the attention these days.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, well thanks for reading~!! :blowkiss: And yeah, it does seem to play out that way, huh~? 0 n0
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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yes, it does. And it annoys me! Hahaha I think I'm just not understanding the whole point of the thing, but I'd just honestly rather something more structured.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I agree~! I guess traditional fixed forms (rhyming poetry) just seems to be more carefully articulated and thought through (: Definitely more time consuming though! :XD:
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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah! So they're usually better.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's the goal at least! ^^;
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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah, haha.
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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
And by the way, It's really lovely! I enjoyed it!
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Saffella Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh my I really like this one! <3
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~!! I'm glad! :happybounce:
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