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    It came in tasteful gestures on a shouldered backward breeze. Ghosts of smiling children rocked the rusting set of swings. Plucking yellow daisy tops, in streams the stones did sink. While birds of cream and navy rode above a gust of pink. The sun rays pressed their fingers through the isle of cobwebbed clouds. Spitting shafts of sunlight lift the humming branches' sound. The sipping of the soil weaned as dewdrops fell in threes. In this brutte of cradled roots I lay beneath the trees.
I know nature is a subject poets have literally beat - to - death,
but when I woke up this morning and looked out my window, I couldn't help but scribble down a few observations... C:


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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you so much for writing a decent poem that isn't free verse. I'm not extremely knowledgeable about poetry but it seems like free verse stuff gets all the attention these days.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, well thanks for reading~!! :blowkiss: And yeah, it does seem to play out that way, huh~? 0 n0
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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yes, it does. And it annoys me! Hahaha I think I'm just not understanding the whole point of the thing, but I'd just honestly rather something more structured.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I agree~! I guess traditional fixed forms (rhyming poetry) just seems to be more carefully articulated and thought through (: Definitely more time consuming though! :XD:
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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah! So they're usually better.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's the goal at least! ^^;
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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah, haha.
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Evilameba Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
And by the way, It's really lovely! I enjoyed it!
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Saffella Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh my I really like this one! <3
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~!! I'm glad! :happybounce:
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Saffella Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:hug: :love:
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theresahelmer Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Professional Photographer
I am so very proud to be part of this. Superb!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you so much for allowing me to use your photography~!
You have some of the most beautiful pictures I've ever seen~!! :love:
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theresahelmer Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Professional Photographer
keep talking to me like that, you know i could use a new daughter (since my daughter is grown now...)...kidding aside, please know you are so welcome to use the image, and you are so kind and generous with your comments, so sweet of you
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, well thank you (:
I'm very glad you like it~! :happybounce:
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Lianvis-Amnell Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012
I love how the words all flow together. The mood brings to light nature at its best! :heart:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much~!! :happybounce:
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shaunafaye Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love this poem! I saw how you like feedback too(I also love feedback) I'll give it. I love how this poem is just a stream of thoughts. Nice thoughts of what you see.
Can I get your opinion on my poems?
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course~! Never a problem to read poetry from fellow writers~ :aww:
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shaunafaye Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
XD
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LuXun1986 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
LOl nothings wrong with using nature. Great poem. ^w^
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thanks~! Much appreciated (: :aww:
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GalaxyGoddess Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really pretty. I'm not a great reader of poetry, but I know what I like.

I'm not fond of the font, it's hard to read for me, but you have such lovely imagery, though "brutte" isn't a word I would use, it seems to ruin the imagery just a little. I don't know what other word I would use, but as someone unfamiliar with the word, it just jumps out at me as odd.

Otherwise, really lovely.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the feedback~!! I understand what you mean. Actually, while I was writing it, I had such a hard time trying to find a word to replace it I eventually just moved on XD And as for the font, I know there is a little button in the top right corner of the poem that says "aA" that you can click to enlarge the font~ :thanks:
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GalaxyGoddess Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for telling me about that. Should help me later :D
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