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Remember those winters by the lake so long ago?
We were bundled in cotton and swaddled in snow.
Soft naked footprints 'cross paralyzed sea.
The breath of our skin left a pathway of steam.


Like music box figures, we'd spin on ten toes.
Our breath fogged the walls of our hourglass dome.    
Folding our secrets like white paper swans,
we kissed them with wax and we locked them in jars.


The trees were our fortress. The sky was our home.
Our ink splattered fingers carved hearts in the stone.
We fashioned red kites 'round the waist of our wrists.
They left for us tails through the rings of cream mist.


We laughed and we danced through the stuttering breeze
In sea ships of cardboard and crowns laced with leaves.
We'd wake up each morning to symphonic quails.
And under the stars we dreamed silver sails.
I wrote this poem off a line from one of my previous poems,
There Was a Storm Today lol shamelessly self advertizing.

I'd also really like to thank my faithful watchers and comment-ers who have been so encouraging and welcoming my first few weeks here!! :love:


You guys are the best. Really. Don't stop. I love it.


The Preview image was found here [link]
And belongs to rightful owners. :salute:


Other Poetry By Me:
Pianist: [link]
Beneath The Black Willows: [link]
In The Garden: [link]
Yellow Spring: [link]



Poem Sadee Esquivel
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student Writer
Oh, I love it. This is actually really good - the rhyme was interesting, and the imagery caught and held me. It's nostalgic and golden but at the same time very personal.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~!! I'm glad you liked it~! :hug:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Student Writer
:D haha me too! You're welcome, no problem :)
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lone-bean Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is gorgeous (i dont know if a poem can be gorgeous but this one is) i believe this is my favorite piece of poetry
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow~!! Such a compliment!! :faint: Thank you so so much~ :love:
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lone-bean Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
haha you're very welcome!! (:
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student Writer
I love this so much. The imagery, word choice, flow, all of it makes me envy every last detail of the picture you create.

Thank you so much for sharing this,
Tristan Cody.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you for all the kind words!! :hug:
I'm really glad you liked it (:
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student Writer
All my pleasure! Hope to see more soon!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: I'll do my best not to disappoint!
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student Writer
I am sure you will not!
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fireflyskys Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really well written, and I like how it flows. The imagery in my head while I was reading was amazing!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! It is greatly appreciated! :hug:
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DarkAqua1202 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012   Writer
Very well written -- just like your other poetry!

Fantastic work!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~!! You always leave such nice comments. :thanks:
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my-soul-is-mine Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
I really like this, well done.

On a dumb moment note, on the line "like music box figures, we'd spin on ten toes" I forgot that people had ten toes... and I almost posted a comment asking "Why ten?".
sometimes... sometimes..
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha!!! :giggle: It's alright.. I have moments like this daily XD
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my-soul-is-mine Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
I do, too... I get worried for my own sanity sometimes.
At least this time I caught myself. Usually I actually post comments saying things like that.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hah.. well If you did, I probably would've questioned my sanity too.. XD Recounting my toes and whatnot~ :blush:
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my-soul-is-mine Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
Haha... I'd count my own and think I was weird. like a year ago my dad tricked me into thinking I should only have four toes on each foot, so I must be a mutant because I have five.. I am so ashamed of myself sometimes.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really?? Haha!! That's not too bad... :XD: My friend's dad once convinced me that P.F. Chang stands for Phil and Fred Chang. :facepalm: The sad thing is that I told all my friends thinking I was smart xD
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my-soul-is-mine Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
I do that all the time.. I just spread false things. I believe paranormal activity was based on a trued story, even though it had an alternate ending. I'd watched both endings, too.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Same here~!! I was legitimately convinced it was all real.
.....Until I found out there was a screenplay writer and director...
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