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There was something of the night, she would say, which had always frightened her.
It wasn't the moonless shadows or the strange prolixity of sounds, but the way the skyline would shatter just beyond the city's crest, as if proving to her childish mind that nothing is truly limitless. Not even the sky.

Just a bit of the book I may start writing...
I've never written anything of this kind of length or depth before, so I'm a bit hesitant to start but I figured hey, even if I completely loose all motivation or it ends up being a flop, at least I tried :lol:
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have always wanted to write a novel !!! I am definitely going to try now ! oh btw! Your words are marvelous... I had to search what prolixity meant but other then that I think I can be at your level ;) !!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! I actually wrote this the same day I found out what it meant x) I just loved the sound of it so I had to put it to some sort of use :D
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wow... this is some start! I loved it! I don't know why you have named it untitled but the way the little mind couldn't comprehend that idea (I am assuming it is a young girl) and it was not the terrors that terrorize typical minds but more than that. Quite wonderful... short and has quite the impact!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad that you enjoyed it ^^
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :)
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012   Writer
i think you should definitely go for it.
you show remarkable potential for someone as young as you are, and your writing is immortal
i hope you realize, someday your words will change the world. it has already started to.

thank you, for sharing your beautiful art
it's quite humbling. :heart:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness, this comment means so so much to me, thank you. I will certainly try not to disappoint! :thanks:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student Writer
This is REALLY beautiful. I love these sort of self-contained flash fictions. Except that in the context of a longer work, that may be a problem - this does feel self-contained. Although maybe in the context of a larger piece that would be less striking.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ahh, very true. Although I have read a few novels that still seemed to uphold those certain paragraphs/quotes of self-containment. They stand out among the rest, but still seem to carry the book's overall theme. Of course doing that myself and reading how another person has done it are veeerry different things x) So thank you!! I'll be sure to keep your comment in mind!! :nod:
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winterkate Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
Hey, you're really welcome! The transfer from any genre to another can be really difficult - you seem to be handling it very well :)
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
starting a novel? this could be interesting. do your best!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!! I'll try! O vO
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012
beautiful :D
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you thank you~ O vO
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LivingInMyThoughts Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012
This sounds really cool. Food for thought. :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~! I appreciate it C:
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breezypixy Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012
I like this. I'm very interested to learn more about the girl. :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~! I am as well! :aww:
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akky3210 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Even if you completely lose all motivation, at least you wrote this. LOVE it! :eager:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, well thank you! I'm very glad! O vO
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akky3210 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :D
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Xx-Cake-xX Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You must finish, I have to say I relate to everything in it all ready. Especially today.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thank you~! I hope that everything is all right~:hug:
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Xx-Cake-xX Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's grown better. Just have to wait things out.
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Xx-Cake-xX Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Cute :)
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Selimeia Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You created quite some depth here with only those few phrases. Sounds like quite a... melancholic story to me that you are (were? Please don't tell me you stopped, it would surely be a loss!) planning. What's it about? I'm curious :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, no, I'm still writing for sure~!! Yes, it sort of play out with that kind of melancholic component. If I finish, it will probably end up as more of a realistic type drama than anything else.
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Selimeia Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, come on, just tell me. What is it about? Can you read it anywhere? Maybe even on dA? :eager:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I haven't posted/uploaded it anywhere yet! I probably won't until it's finished, but I may upload the first chapter. The plot line (and it's very basic at this point) is more about this young boy who, every night, secretly allows his friend (a girl whom he met under odd circumstances) to stay in his house without his parents knowledge. He later finds out more of her back story which includes a significant amount of abuse aaaaaaand it just gets more complex from there xD If you have any suggestions I would love to hear them aswell! but again, it is still more of a skeleton at this point x3
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Selimeia Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'd love to suggest and maybe have a first beta-look before it appears anywhere (I can be a critic, believe me! :D), but I'd need the entire skeleton for that.

I like the idea, it's an extraordinary setting - just make sure that the girl doesn't turn out to become a cliche, it's always easy to enter old schemes when it comes to the subject of abuse :/
But I'm sure you'll be able to avoid that.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, that sounds like a very appealing concept. A critic/editor to guide me along. And I am making quite sure to avoid any cliches, (that was actually my main focus when starting) C: This character is extremely complex and I'm still trying to understand her idiosyncrasies as well. If it would be alright, could I possibly send you the draft of the introduction once it's finished? It should only be a few pages long.
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Selimeia Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It would be an honour for me, I really did enjoy the glimpse I already got from your style, so I'm very much looking forward to this :)
If you want to, you can also note me and introduce the character or whatever else you need help on - I'm always more than happy to support great projects!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Great!! I'll be sure to do that once it's done O vO
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TheEnglishRider99 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very good. The word "surreal" keeps coming to my mind for some reason. You should continue!!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! I think I will ^ u^
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TheEnglishRider99 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I can't wait!!
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GABanks118 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Student Writer
Go for it. I've tried, say, six or seven times to start writing a book unsuccessfully, and now I've got 64 pages and counting. Only time will tell whether the idea works or not, but I definitely want to read more, to see where this is going.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, that so exciting! Are you planning on getting published?
This story is still a skeleton right now, but I've been having these ideas tumbling around my head for so long, I think they would best be displayed through a book.
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GABanks118 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Student Writer
Really, you should go for it. Just try to write a first chapter and see what it's like.
On a separate note, make sure you don't let the notion of writing a book pressure you into making chapters a certain length. Not saying that you would, per-say, but it's something I had a problem figuring out on my own.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the advice (: I will definitely keep that in mind~! :pc:
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