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And so I tried to hold your letters
the way you used to hold my hand;
fingers spaced between torn  edges and
around undotted i's.
Guiding me away
from those gentle autumn leaves that
I had loved to crunch
so very much.
But instead, I stepped against the sunspots
of every promise you had broken
trying just to pull some meaning from a sentence
ending with "goodbye".
And when my eyes began to slide over the words you had misspelled,
I closed your note
and tore it into nothing.
Nothing but a sad reminder that once again you had cracked
like those gentle autumn leaves
that I had loved
so very much.
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Just a little something to let you guys know I'm still alive ^^;
School's been really heavy since I started a few weeks ago, so I apologize for my inactivity....

But anyways, I'll try to upload something more substantial later!!


Commets and favorites are very very very very very very loved~! :thanks:
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`dreamsinstatic Sep 14, 2012  Professional Writer
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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~HoldTheNoise Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!! :blowkiss:
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`dreamsinstatic Sep 18, 2012  Professional Writer
You're welcome.
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~BelaRoseWolf Sep 12, 2012  Student Writer
This poem is really beautiful! :D I love the emotion, the theme, your word choice, and of course the flow too! I really enjoyed it. Great work! :D
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Mood: Joy ~HoldTheNoise Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, well thank you so much for taking the time to read it :D I'm glad you enjoyed~!! :blowkiss:
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~BelaRoseWolf Sep 13, 2012  Student Writer
You're very welcome~
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~HoldTheNoise Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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Mood: Drooling ~akky3210 Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:jawdrop: :eager: :omfg: :la: (There really aren't enough emoticons to describe the awesome-ness of this!) Woah! This is really really good! I have to strive for weeks on end to get something approaching this quality. You have a really good sense of rhythm, so the poem barely even reads as free verse. You convey such a sense of character in only a few short lines--I've read novels with less characterization (which probably says something about the novels I like...^^;). Absolutely stunning! I can't wait to see more of your work!
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Mood: Wow! ~HoldTheNoise Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow!! Thank you so much for the encouraging comment <33 and thank you for taking the time to read it~!! :happybounce: I will try my best not to disappoint! :D
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