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Such gentle colors drip across your freckled shoulder blades.
A quilt of puddled watercolors soaked in auburn shades.

Spun of golden rivulets and rinsed in autumn skies,
So many endless currents swimming through your lonesome eyes.

Brushing under fingertips and over shattered songs,
Unraveling like morning glaze against my paling palms.

With beauty like October hills and hollow as the skies,
The water drops against the earth will be our lullaby.
Something I just recently dug up from my trip to the Tennessee Mountains not too long ago. I completely forgot this poem existed actually (x

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Oh my goodness, thank you all so much for my very first DD!! I'm so honored I don't even know what to do. Thank you to all the people who have taken the time to read it and to all the lovely comments! It is all greatly appreciate~! :blowkiss:
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Given 2012-11-13
October Eyes has enchanting rhyme and a lilting rhythm. Have some words, courtesy of ~HoldTheNoise ( Suggested by Nyatto and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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Makotomari Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
Wow. Talk about less is more. :)
Short and Simple. Very beautiful and inspiring.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! (:
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Coliri Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Tan simple y tan hermoso <3
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aw, muchas gracias!
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RayneChordalyne Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I really like this... I can see it becoming a song, all too easily.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, if only I could write music!! ^^;
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have featured this piece in my journal: [link]
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! (:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello there :) first, congrats on the DD! This work surely deserved it :) Now lets see... well there is little critical to say. I love the rhyme and rhythm and the soft expressions with wonderful meter just make one read it again and again. Wonderful imagery! I would say that the beauty of the work is in the flow of it. Anyways, good job and keep writing!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I really appreciate the kind words! :hug:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :)
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Ateendra Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
Thrilling. :D Nice, nice. :D
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
nice cadence and warm sentiments
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words :blowkiss:
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
for someone so young you are truly gifted
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
aw, well thank you very much! Age is just a number ^u^
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
so true, talent is not a respector of longevity.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   General Artist
Congratulations on the greatly deserved DD, lovely! :tighthug:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :blowkiss:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012   General Artist
You are most welcome! :heart:
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Halcyal Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Strung with evocative turnings and shadings of thought. Spun with a rare competence of craft in its rhythm and phrasing. It laps and breaths and chimes with its language, deftly worked, making the sort of thing that is a true delight to find. My sincere compliments.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! What a beautiful comment :love:
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latiro-mazzaire Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is very well-written! Bravo!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :blowkiss:
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Professional Writer
This poem has just about the best flow I have ever encountered. Which of course fits perfectly with the imagery. It is beautiful. Congrats on a very well=-earned DD!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness, such a compliment!! I'm flattered! :blush:
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Professional Writer
You are entirely welcome. :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Too often, many fixed verse I see here on dA are forced. But the reason so many like your poem is that the flow and rhyme reads & feels so gently natural - that's why. :+favlove:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the comment! :hug: I'm glad you like it!
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
You're most welcome :hug:... how could I not?
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akky3210 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I adore it! The rhyming is very well done. (:

Super congrats on the DD!!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!! :blowkiss:
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful... the words, the imagery, the rhyme scheme... all of it.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I appreciate you taking the time to read it. :hug:
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Saphire-Rose Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Beautifully written! A treasure to read. =)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
And thank you for taking the time!! :blowkiss:
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MeadowSparrow Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
If I could add this to my favorites a thousand times over I totally would... I absolutely love it... its so rich with description, and dripping with imagery.... Ahh.. I could live in this moment forever...
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness, this is such a beautiful comment!! It makes me so happy to know that some people still appreciate literature like this~~ :heart:
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bloedzuigerbloed Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You dream gorgeously. :heart:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!! I'm glad you like it~ :aww:
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bloedzuigerbloed Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! Much deserved DD. You can trust I'll be watching for many more beautiful works from you.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well thanks again! I appreciate it~ :hug:
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bloedzuigerbloed Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome... again, ha, ha! :D
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StrongButGentle Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's so beautiful :love:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :aww:
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StrongButGentle Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome :)
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dreamingofsunshine Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Student
oh my goodness. absolutely amazing. its like a dream...
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you so much!! I appreciate you taking the time to read it :aww:
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KitaMikichi Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Beautiful work!
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