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    When you are young,
they will treat you with the softness of spring.
They will guide you through the winter winds and
over snowy hills, admiring the brilliance of your
midday innocence; pulling daisies from the earth
just to place them in your hair. And they will
whisper to each other of how beautiful you are.
    When you grow older,
they will treat you with the indifferences of autumn.
They will urge you from the complacency of your own
fleeting fulfillments, and they will watch your
brilliance fade with the swiftness of the sky. You
will shed your fragile childhood with the colors of
the trees, and you will learn to face the winter winds
without their guiding arms. And they will whisper to
each other of how beautiful you are.
    When you are grown,
they will treat you with the coldness of winter. They
will leave you bare and naked before the ravenous wolves,
expecting you to fend for your own forgotten brilliance,
asking why you've kept those wilting daisies in your hair.
They will whisper through the icy winds of how fortunate you
are, to have one time danced and sung beneath the softness
of the spring; to have one time lived with midday brilliance
beaming from your face. and I swear that they will whisper
of how beautiful you once were.
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Maliceah Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014
And how beautiful you always will be.  Age only changes beauty, it does not erase it.  :)  
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I wish everyone saw it this way. :thanks:
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RosemonkeyCT Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderfully written, and painfully true.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I appreciate it (:
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FreakyFanatic101 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This was just beautiful. I especially loved how you compared it to the passing time; Spring, Summer, Autum, and Winter, to properly get the reader to feel as if they are moving. Everyone at one point is the person smiling and laughing while daisies are being put in their hair, the ones who cling onto them long after they've died, clinging to those simple moments in the sun that make you smile even today.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness what a beautiful comment. Thank you so much for understanding exactly what I was trying to communicate. I appreciate your words very much ~!!
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FreakyFanatic101 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, it was great to read it!
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Baumarius Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Take the first paragraph... that section of a person's life... What would happen if you never lost that?
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Some don't. And I think those people miss out on a great deal of life ....
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Baumarius Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
No... like... if they didn't lose all of it, but still progressed. Like they developed differently.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think it would be rare, but I bet some people've managed to keep it~! And I think a bit of it comes back to us the older and more dependent we become; the less of the world we understand and the farther our lives drift from the present back into the past. So I guess in away, time gives us the option to become naive once again. For those of us who've already lost it. But I wonder too, if it were never lost how that would all play out ...

.... Hah, man I definitely didn't expect to do so much thinking tonight. but now that you've thrown it out there I can't stop!!
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Baumarius Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
I've managed to develop in that way a little bit... A lot remains. I have Asperger's, so it kinda makes sense XP
It's not a bad thing for me. It mixes into things as I grow older(I am moving forward)... but it is still there. It is very rare... and that sickens me a bit. I think it is an amazing thing to understand... I wish other people could understand it the way I do.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have a brother with Down Syndrome (completely different, I know) and I think it must be wonderful to be able to grow older but never grow up. He'll be a child forever. Until the day he dies at least. And I guess there's something both happy and sad about that fact.
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Baumarius Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
I understand what you mean... It just depends on how you look at it.
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SpiderwebWisher Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have, no words. This is beautifully written with a soft voice of it's own, narrating the reader, keeping them interested. It has a really great flow to it too. Good job. :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for such kind words :thanks:
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SpiderwebWisher Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. :)
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ramenlover16 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Writer
This is really beautiful and superbly written. The way you weave your words together really is amazing.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much dear~!!
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C-A-Harland Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Student Writer
I love how you've woven the passing of time into this in a variety of ways, days, seasons, lifetimes. It makes for a very beautiful piece. 
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much~!! I appreciate the kind words
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Levymandias Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem has very a deep meaning that has just spoken to conscious...my reaction...awe. Good job.Sweating a little... 
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!! It always makes me so happy to see positive, genuine reactions and such (:
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Sparky-Sumi Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is gorgeous!! I love how it flows! I love how you incorporated seasons into it!
I just love it! :heart:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thank you so much!! I'm glad you like it :aww:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
Hey there, for #projecteducate this week we are exploring poetry forms. Myself, `thetaoofchaos and =AzizrianDaoXrak discussed Free Verse poetry here and featured this deviation. Just thought I'd let you know! Thanks.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow!! Thank you so much! I'm honored~! :love:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
:D
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Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like how you incorporated nature into this one. This has to be one of your best !
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you thank you~!! I think this may have been the most fun to write so far (:
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Thorns-And-Roses Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   General Artist
Beautiful work! Absolutely gorgeous. Two thumbs up!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!!! :love:
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I'm honored! <3
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BakuSpirit Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist
You are so welcome ♥~
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AngelOfThursday23 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is brilliant, a true confession of human nature
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you so much for reading (:
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AmberZ-ArtThings Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Student Photographer
Oh my, do you realize how brilliant you are? <3 You never cease to amaze me
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh <3 well... erm... thank you very much! :aww:
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sonatabrej Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Blew my mind, astounding
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you so much <3
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sonatabrej Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Thank you mate, this is briliant
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MockingJay1256 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Absolutely wonderful! I have not come accross something so unique!!!! I've never thought of comparing stages of growing up to the seasons! It expels BRILLIANCE! :D
But what about summer? :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness, thank you so much for the kind words! I've actually had someone else ask me about summer too, and I felt that it may make it seem a bit redundant? I was also worried that if it was too long, people might dismiss it and feel too lazy to start x) haha
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MockingJay1256 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! And those are some good reasons, leave it as it is because its wonderful just the way it is right now!! :D love it :heart:
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Scr1b3 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
what inspiered this?
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh. It's hard to even remember. For the past three years my family and I have been flying back and forth from the Philippines to the us, going into orphanages and the big cities, and while I'm going there and back, I've been comparing their culture to our own and I've found very little similarities. The biggest though, was the sense of growth. And I started to realize that the system of growth and aging can be similar to all people. I saw the poverty and the many older people who lived there all alone, and I realized how easily human lives can be discarded. And it reminded me of the winter. Um, I'm not really sure that there is much else to it ^^;
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Scr1b3 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wooow. You must be quite the philosapher then!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, well, maybe some day :aww:
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Scr1b3 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:) why not start now?
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