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Beneath the black willows
the moonlight deploys
unnoticed through soft braided reeds.
Though fingers were broken
the moonbeams disperse
like organ pipes sifting the breeze.

Beneath the black willows
a violet crow falls
to perch upon empty a chest.
A hollowed form spun
through the breath of the wind
His toes brushed the finger tipped crest.

Beneath the black willows
there swings a white noose
and from it there swings a man high.
He dances each morning
He dances each night
I imagine he's thankful to fly.
Another poem about death...yeah...


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nickie101 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're very talented!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!
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Hardly-Crazy Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012
All I can say is wow.
This is too good for words :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you so so much!! Your support is far enough <33:glomp:
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Hardly-Crazy Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012
No problem ^^
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dgREYmOUSER Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012
.. particularly enjoyed the last stanza. :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Agh, thanks~!! The last stanza's my favorite too!! :iconcblushplz:
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You have such a gift. Do not waste it.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~!! I'm trying my best not to~ :thanks:
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LookingGlassInk Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
Marvelous writing. You have a way of creating vivid images that many writers lack. You've done an excellent job with this poem and I especially love the darkly glib note that you end on with "I imagine he's thankful to fly." Great work. Thanks for sharing. :)
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you for reading~!! It's very encouraging to see people like my work~! :squee:
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GreenSprite Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Gah! I'm so sorry for the previous nonsense comment. I have trouble logging in from this computer and I thought clicking "add comment" would take me to a login page, which it did, but I didn;t think it would really post the comment too without asking me again. I really am sorry.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, it's fine~!! I can relate to the quirks of having a screwed up computer XD
(mine shuts itself off after every ten minutes and won't turn back on for another twenty) :cough:
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GreenSprite Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
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blueisme Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
I love it! Great sense of imagery and powerful words used. Perhaps they rhythm could use work and maybe a teensy bit of rhyme or alliteration or something could be used to make it flow better. But it's still amazing!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading~! And thank you for the suggestions (:
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blueisme Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
No problem~
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freefromyounow Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing!!!!! Please submit more to :iconhipstersofda:!!!!!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~!! Once I come up with more I shall~ :love:
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freefromyounow Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
fantastic!
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Demyboilover Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This was amazing.. kind of brought a tear to my eye. :')
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you~!! I'm glad it had that effect on you~! :blush:
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lilstrawberry14 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I sat here trying to think of an appropriate well thought out helpful reply, but all I came up with was, wow. Sorry. xD This piece is truly amazing though.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:wow: Really?? Thank you so much~!! :squee:
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lilstrawberry14 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. (:
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MaxwellSmaart Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
Fantastic. I like the rhythm and I really liked the simile you used in the first stanza. Overall, well written. I enjoyed the read!
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you for reading~!! I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it! :thanks:
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MaxwellSmaart Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
Of course! :)
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rumtumtugger2112 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
This is seriously incredible. I love this! I love your use of vocabulary and dialogue. It's really incredible. ♥
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so so much~!! I'm glad you like it! :blush:
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Scarlet-Lark Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow, this is really beautiful, and I love the last stanza. You've used some of my favorite imagery, and have pulled me into a shadowed world in a most beautiful way. The only thing that I could suggest taking a look at is the third line of the second stanza. I'm assuming that it was meant to say "to perch upon an empty chest", but I am not sure. Overall, fantastic job, I really enjoyed this piece.
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HoldTheNoise Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much~!! I love to see these comments :love:
Oh yes!! That third line is probably a result of too much traditional french poetry reading XD ^^;
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